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The Comfort of a Cliche in the Morning
She pretends
she's still asleep
as he rolls out of bed,
prepares to leave
Oh well
there's plenty more
fish in the sea
and you have to fuck
a lot of frogs
before you find
a Prince
Last few words:
seems I'm writing a lot of short poems at the moment, a reflection of the time I have to write I guess. Be interested to know if this one works, as is, or if I need to add some more?
Editing stage:
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Comments
Kailashana2
Sun, 2011-02-06 09:59
Do not add a word. Do not
Do not add a word. Do not subtract a word.
I will say it: I LOVE THIS POEM, BRILLIANT!
(Onward to more frogs!) lol.
~
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:14
lol :) Thanks Anna :) just
lol :) Thanks Anna :) just what I needed, will leave it how it is! but no more frogs for me I'm a happily married woman now, much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentBlue_Halcyon
Sun, 2011-02-06 10:14
Be careful!
Some of those frogs have warts! Literally! Really though, are any of them really princes? This is a harsh peek at the sad but true reality of life.
It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:16
Happily, not a reflection of
Happily, not a reflection of my reality, there are princes, I snagged me one lol :) but what a lot of frogs it took :) thanks for your read and your comment, much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentKailashana2
Sun, 2011-02-06 10:34
No, unfortunately, every frog
No, unfortunately, every frog I've ever kissed was a prince with many warts.
I wouldn't mind kissing one with just one wart. I'd be a happy camper.
;-)
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:18
gotta love 'em warts n all ;)
gotta love 'em warts n all ;) xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentfaerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:23
Thanks Shirl, glad it gave
Thanks Shirl, glad it gave you a laugh :) much love back frog lover xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentKailashana2
Sun, 2011-02-06 12:58
Now, even the title is
Now, even the title is PERFECT!
Cheerios and hip hip hurrah!
~A
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:24
Oh dear Anna, love it,
Oh dear Anna, love it, brilliant and perfect, what would the elf say? ;)) xxx ps haven't changed the title? xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentRoscoe Lane
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:09
Must you,
Must you girls be so rude to us chaps, though i may look like a frog, i have always attended my duties in a princely manner. And warts i would not know what you speak of. Seriously a good funny write, leave it as it is. Regards Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:28
:) lol Hi Roscoe, will leave
:) lol Hi Roscoe, will leave it as it stands for sure, never expected such positive reaction :) I never gave up believing there were 'princes' snagged me a good'un last year, he proved I was right to never stop believing :) much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentPsyve
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:37
Wartever...
Very nice. Perfectly describes the morning after the one-night-stand.
As Anna has said, succinctly put and says exactly what it wants to and no more.
Thank you, I enjoyed the read.
Psyve
P.S. : For some reason whenever Ithink of the Frog and the Princess story, I remember Mad Magazine's Don Martin's version...where the Princess leans over, smooches the frog *SMOOOOOOCH!!* and *PAFF!* turns into a frog herself....
..wartever....
...twisted fairy tales....
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:45
Hi Psyve, glad you enjoyed
Hi Psyve, glad you enjoyed the poem and it was successful in capturing that morning after the night before feeling, tis somewhere i found myself a lot during my 20s, happily married woman now though :) I like your ps :) have you ever seen Shrek? much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentPsyve
Sun, 2011-02-06 14:51
Shrek?
Saw all three installments. The first two with the kids...the last with my wife... as we are now empty nesters.
Loved all three but particularly enjoyed the first.
Psyve
faerybeki
Sun, 2011-02-06 15:00
Yeah the first is brilliant,
Yeah the first is brilliant, great twist :) there's a fourth, Shrek forever after, shrek with a It's a Wonderful Life kinda feel. We've watched them all, loads, my 3 year old is a HUGE fan, more love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
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