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Infatuation
First i feel an aura
That can calm any storm
Heal any pain for the
Rest of time then adorn
A smile i do, as her lips
Move to form the word hello
Her voice sensual, crisp
I was nervous but now mellowed
Still in aw by her glance
That sends me into a heaven
Only known through her dance
Her body's blessing
How she smells, is a mix of fruit
And flower, quite fragrant
Theraputic. Feeling stupid
That a dream is my infatuation
Style / type:
Free verse
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Last few words:
A sadness I face that's been hard for me to explain......
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Comments
Frenchf
Thu, 2013-02-21 07:43
I presume
Never consumated?
Hence a memory for ever?
Well written