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A Thought A Feeling
You are there without a form
Just a pattern that I know is you
What can I do for you as you draw near?
Things to me in the now are not clear.
I could feel the colours of your touch.
Your gentle think inside my mind
Yet there is no message that I can find
Oh! Thank you! I know why you visit so.
Just to tell me that you love me is fine
my love for you spans all of time.
There is an infinity of things to learn
I still need more time, before I return.
Is not for me to say that when
I should journey home again.
Is it true that in all the things I do?
There will be several things left undone.
I thank you for being here with your son
I love the very thought of you my mum.
We will meet as the time brings us near
Reach out within my think I will be there.
Comments
Seren
Thu, 2013-11-07 07:20
Ian, Who really knows ? But if it brings comfort and peace
It cant be a bad thing, I really liked this piece, this was written for your Mum ? the last stanza took me to that conclusion, it really is peaceful there is a sense of wonderment and timelessness that is conveyed so well you have also given me an idea for a poem I will scratch out a rough piece tonight and work on it
The ladies face is not for others eyes it is a gift to you :)
love always JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Thu, 2013-11-07 07:26
Jayne
It was written as a message from the face I saw on a tile here in front of me I use for decoupage, it just reminded me of a wonderful lady.
Thanks for your read and lovely to walk with you again,
Yours Ian xx
PS:- I have just taken a photo of it so if it comes out I shall post on my face book yours Ian xx
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Seren
Thu, 2013-11-07 07:28
I will add some footprints to
I will add some footprints to the lawn tonight I plan to go night wandering ;) I really enjoyed this peaceful piece it put me in the right mood to finish writing the poem I am going to post tonight
love always JC xxx
p.s I will keep an eye on FB :)
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Rula
Thu, 2013-11-07 07:58
Ian
Do you mean a. specific "lady's" face. Anyway it could be about anyone you feel love to.
Nicely portrayed..
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Ian.T
Thu, 2013-11-07 08:05
Rula
Thank you for your visit, yes the face looked as my Mother did in her later years, I have posted the pic on my Face book for anyone to see,
Take care, Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
weirdelf
Thu, 2013-11-07 09:55
Lovely, Ian
Well written, a gentle, deep emotion without a hint of sentimentality.
Your gentle think deep inside my mind [lose 'deep',it will scan better]
My love for you spans all the times [all of time]
To return home though I do yearn [I do yearn, contrived. Hard to think of a suggestion, perhaps-
Homewards always I will turn
cheers,
Jess
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Ian.T
Thu, 2013-11-07 17:22
Jess
thank you for your critique, I shall attend to those points in the morning, they are very good, and as you know I will always listen to what you say. Thank you.
Will talk tomorrow, I am tired today must have got up too fast, and I have a lot of things to answer.
Take care out there, you are but a thought away, Yours Ian
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weirdelf
Fri, 2013-11-08 06:27
Cool,I think that's better.
Do you?
cheers,
Jess
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Ian.T
Fri, 2013-11-08 10:10
Thanks Jess
It reads a lot better I should pay more attention to when I write them and post. I need to spend a bit more time on the streaming.
Hope you are well.
It is good to have you critique like this must be easier than some of the better written poetry.
Take care out there and talk to you soon, Yours Ian.T
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weirdelf
Fri, 2013-11-08 10:48
Want to hear how it sounds to me?
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0UwG1UFD986
cheers,
Jess
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Ian.T
Fri, 2013-11-08 18:33
Jess
Beautifully read, it appears that your voice was perfect for this piece,
I am having troubles with finding it again, but I shall try.
Thank you so very much for doing this and I know others will be so thankful when you speak their poetry.
Take care out there and know we are thinking of you..
Yours Ian
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So find more reasons to believe in others..