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A Poetic Fib (Fibonacci Poetry)

I'm
not
goddess
Demeter
or Persephone
but I sow thoughts where summers tread
then the sunshine would bathe them warm to grow endlessly.

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Last few words: 
An attempt in Jess's fibonacci form of poetry. Not sure that I've captured the right idea of "enthusiastic bewonderment" though, and wasn't brave enough to go beyond the 7 th line. I thought sonnets are easier to write LOL *Demeter (in Greek ancient Myth) is the goddess of the harvest, who presided over grains and the fertility of the earth **Persephone (in Greek Myth) is Demeter's daughter, the queen of the underworld and the goddess of spring. The reference is always the Wikipedia
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I think the last word 'read' blows the sense of wonder though.
Perhaps instead of 'for a read' 'endlessly'?

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you . I think I was ambitious to rhyme 'tread' with 'read' . Thanks for the suggestion.

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I appreciate the effort and the quality of your work in trying all these different styles.

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

My pleasure you like it.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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