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MI RICORDO [ I REMEMBER ]
MI RICORDO
[I REMEMBER ]
a gray silence fell on the House
pale faces in black dresses
moved in slow motion
across the kitchen floor
like robots doing daily chores
no word was spoken
one voice was missing
one seat was empty
one House was broken
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Comments
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-08-18 11:42
Joe
A good picture of a house that has lost a member, there always seems to be a space there, nothing seems to be able to fill the space as it echoes all the years of memories someone has laid at the table.
Go well young Joe, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geremia
Sun, 2013-08-18 12:12
YES. The silence lingers.
YES. The silence lingers.
mand
Sun, 2013-08-18 12:34
Hi Joe
Powerful imagery! The expression "A gray silence.." set the scene of this sad and sombre occasion. Anyone who has lost someone they love in death will fully understand and relate to everything in this poem, especially the last three lines.
This a good write Joe - well done.
LOve Mand xxxxx
Geremia
Sun, 2013-08-18 16:48
thank you, Mand.
thank you, Mand.
loved
Tue, 2013-12-10 19:06
superbly
superbly
sad yes ,
but absolutely marvelous
some day
we will also leave an empty chair
silently
swiftly
maybe
unknown
loved
Geremia
Wed, 2013-12-11 06:47
thank you, my friend,
thank you, my friend,
loved
Wed, 2013-12-11 15:32
this new guy taking free rounds
this new guy taking free rounds
says
I know FA of poetry
is it true???
I'd love to hear
from you
loved