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T A B A R E T
your mouth slips phrases
through bruised nights
stars upon your flicks
and at your sides
the worry shadows
keep like windows
locked
milkweed sweet
the monarch drinks
beneath the fat eye
of this sordid dream
a heavens creature
rapture rests
music of chimes
the wavelength nest
spun cup the thoughts
of stirring dark
and rising star
where magic and illusion
mix
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Comments
weirdelf
Wed, 2012-03-28 02:06
beautiful words
meaning nothing to me.
As often I am probably being stupid.
Give me a hint as to meaning.
cheers,
Jess
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Esker
Wed, 2012-03-28 07:24
poets write for poets
would be spoiling the peice to elaborate as I once did
Im liking this not explaining in peices following my works
as it was pointed to me by you and others
maybe some poets can delve into this one and find
some abstract comprehension to them
my works are after all intimate and elaborate shorts
I tend to push myself in creating and writing and in
the past reading works that are not just the norm
thank you
weirdelf
Wed, 2012-03-28 10:04
glad to see you are not explaining your works
good on you.
If the poetry does not stand on its own, it is not poetry.
The again, you may be creating a new form. A poem after a poem is extraordinarily avant garde. I am a radical with conservative tendencies. Perhaps you can pursue it.
I am no arbiter of form. Do what feels right.
cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Esker
Thu, 2012-03-29 07:41
pursue
for poetry yes
angles not written
poets can feel them
and some have written them
Thank You
Ian.T
Wed, 2012-03-28 10:00
Esker
The only thing I can think of, having looked at the title word, is something that is covered by this material and that gives off light and the secrets of those that lay on it, if so very secretly written ????
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Esker
Thu, 2012-03-29 07:39
I like your view of the title Ian
it sounds quest like
a search for the hue of a meaning
not readily found
and knowledge of ritual
Thank You
Kailashana2
Wed, 2012-03-28 10:14
For me, a poem needs to draw
For me, a poem needs to draw out an emotion. (Other than insipid or ho hum boring.) I think you clicked on Esker...avant garde.
Tons of unique and original metaphors, is it Inspiring, evoking something deeper? Each reader has to digest Esker's poem to where "magic and illusion mix".
~A
Esker
Thu, 2012-03-29 07:38
digest..
I like this word it revolves about the use of function
meaning our brain our soul our heart our thoughts
these are the things I find when reading also
Thank You
loved
Thu, 2012-03-29 04:42
I have heard of cabarets not seen one, except in flicks...
I have heard of cabarets not seen one, except in flicks
where magic and illusion
mix
A Nero swings his guitar
and
upon shaded lips
falls a star
and
that's what I can see your poem
from this far
when Rome was burning
he said no one told him
so you remain silent too
please do.
read it with a punch of salt
now I know
what a tabaret is
thanks to you...
humour is my spice
loved
Esker
Thu, 2012-03-29 07:36
"A Nero swings his guitar..."
these lines are an immense poem Loved
"and upon shaded lips
talls a star"
I love your line work and originality
of arrangement in short works like
that in for lines
Thank Y ou'''
loved
Thu, 2012-03-29 11:05
When you are in front of my eyes....
When you are in front of my eyes
I forget the whole world
as much as sky high
and
think of you
what must be traversing
the universe,
past your mind
when you poemise
so much in riddle and rhyme…
they say only the bells chime
but no it’s your thoughts too
that poetry comes so naturally to you
I only try to emulate
and
not knowing poetic nuances
seemingly formulate
and
my solitary mind does sweet lines dictate
but some usually one does say
FA.
loved
Esker
Thu, 2012-03-29 07:33
when there is nothing to meaning..I search
my passion simmering
curiosity not set aside
Is it schools ending that tells
me to put my mind on idle?
no
is it society that tells me to stop
thinking or creating?
no
New words like new days
arrive..new freinds and new
poetry
Thank You!
Proprietress of...
Fri, 2012-03-30 17:01
where magic and illusion mix...
I want to lie down
and fall asleep
inside
this poem
and dream
loved
Fri, 2012-03-30 20:04
Such adept poesy
Such adept poesy
We all missed
till this moment .
Hope the magic and illusion
will intermix
and
create a dream,
as the inner voice
for more does scream
loved
Esker
Fri, 2012-03-30 20:43
perhaps it is pretti Proprietress that I am in a dream
Ere I be
the belonging want
and finding none
but a taste for the dark edged place
in heart and mind
beneath the cold fire of night
and her magi stars for the
wanderers to gauge
where angels shepherd the sleeping
lay
ghosts whisper
what they say
.....