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WHERE ELEPHANTS GO TO DIE --re post and rewrite
Where Elephants Go to Die
in forests dense and dark
there are places
mysterious
where elephants go
to die alone
for alone is how dying is done.
they never know fear
pass on and mourn their dead
in quiet acquiescence
in a forest deep and dark
of my Mind's invention
something of me is hdden
blind to the fear of ending.
it knows its way to that special place
and waits
in quiet acquiescence
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Comments
raj
Fri, 2011-09-02 15:16
Joe...
is this a re-write of Rhia's workshop poem?...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geremia
Fri, 2011-09-02 15:56
No, I wrote ths as the first
No, I wrote ths as the first post when NEO came back. No one seemed interested so I rewrote parts that neeeded some work,
raj
Fri, 2011-09-02 15:59
Ok Joe thanks for the
Ok Joe thanks for the clarification...i will come back later and comment..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Lenny of Cohen
Fri, 2011-09-02 19:50
Graceful
piece of writing Joe. Elephants are one of my favorite animals!
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"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent
Wei Wu Wei
Geremia
Fri, 2011-09-02 21:56
Thanks, Lenny.
Thanks, Lenny.
loved
Fri, 2011-09-02 21:01
Beautiful Sentiment
That can be appreciated
By those who know your condition
And
If you recall
Yul Bryner also had said
Man is born,
Lives and dies alone.
What a great similarity
loved
Geremia
Fri, 2011-09-02 22:00
Interesting. That is what we
Interesting. That is what we say in italian
loved
Fri, 2011-09-02 22:45
ru an Italian
i thought you were
from the
UNITED STATES
loved
raj
Sat, 2011-09-03 16:29
Joe
i didn't know about that side of elephants as explained in the first stanza of your poem...
i liked the way you have connected it with the "mind & thoughts" in the second stanza ...very well done..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geremia
Sat, 2011-09-03 16:35
Thanks. raj/ Elephants have
Thanks. raj/ Elephants have fr the most part a tender heart.
raj
Sat, 2011-09-03 16:49
Joe
you are right...if one cares to look in their eyes one can sense how gentle there heart is...which is a stark contrast to their size
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geremia
Sat, 2011-09-03 17:00
Yes and they have
Yes and they have extraordinary grace in spite of size.
raj
Sat, 2011-09-03 17:06
that's true...their gentle
that's true...their gentle gait...stride...the way they lift their trunk is so pleasing to the eyes...
and after reading the information in the first stanza...they are so graceful in their parting too...
raj (sublime_ocean)