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Bloodstone
Member since April 27, 2010
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the seed and the flower
quite like an old man’s gaze
I thought I felt my shadow grow
as the survey extended to gash
the weighted blade sparing the bones
the sole horizon no longer pure
against marring pedestals of mud
which these hands hollow built
growing harder with each sun
seeking to silence the past
is of no use for the chamber swells
the reverberating echoes
live and shake the cracks
the only perpetual character
I’ve stoked the flames to rise
Read the rest of the poem Show less
to blaze against the dark to the sky
to illume the depths brighter
but it only serves to enrich
dark darker light lighter
no use to shun or to forget
my haunts crying need
to no longer choke blind nor deafen
my past wants me to succeed
it serves to build
and I my own architect
plan the lay of materials
now thought as obscure
but fleeting dreams that enter or run
being such that questions on life begun
are as hard to deduce as their origin
it seems to bark at logic
these manifesting thoughts
that given power can compost the past
their taste only fitting my desire
though memories weigh in
forever following impetus
it is my perceptions that ward
shape and drive the form
my thoughts are dreamers
that never wake in passing
they whisper for I to ear
and hope they fare well externally
the gaze of an old man
though veiled is learned
I am ever present to inception
the seed and the flower
Bloodstone’s timeline
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26 SatAnniversary
15 years of membership
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26 SunAnniversary
10 years of membership
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26 SunAnniversary
5 years of membership
- June 2014
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28 SatReceived a critique
on the seed and the flower from @themoonman
"I do like the poem but it is so abstract there is little to say other than it sounds good read out loud, for me a poem needs more than that. absolutely loved the read though, thanks for posting, Richard" -
23 MonCritiqued
"the inevitable menu " by @loved
"The only truth about birth is guaranteed death ...and then you ruined it with all that text but sure I enjoyed it unpunctuated the other day but not as brave as what's above don't mind me I merely jest and strangely it…" -
23 MonCritiqued
"FADING TO OPAQUE edit" by @Geremia
"But well done. I liked that feel. Only, in the last three lines, consider 'such memories' in place of 'these memories'. Peace Bull-frog;)" -
23 Mon
- April 2014
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28 MonReceived a critique
on Like Fingers from @swamp-witch
"as well, but I think the added syllable makes the line read more smoothly. I really appreciate you taking the time to share your interpretation!" -
28 MonReceived a critique
on Like Fingers from @Ian.T
"The reference to fingers just made me drool. Then someone has to spoil it all and talk about family values. They are damn lucky that they can refer to a family LOL.I shall have to resurrect my early diaries from England…" -
27 SunCritiqued
" Poignant End " by @Search
"...about how we keep ourselves distracted. I dunno - like listening to music, knowing the beat, singing the lyrics but not thinking about the meaning or emotions... It feels like there is a strong correlation between yo…" -
18 FriReceived a critique
on Like Fingers from @Ian.T
"Now where have you been, one poem in two years, always remember all poets are missed, it leaves a gap in time on our walk together. A good write that just needs a little tidy. Great to have you back again and I hope to…" -
18 FriReceived a critique
on Like Fingers from @Eduardo Cruz
"This is deep and well thought out. I feel the dark and light all at once, to me it drives hard and fast with a kind of beat poem that I would hear in the late 60's in NYC. I love the reference to the Beatle song, which…" -
17 ThuReceived a critique
on Like Fingers from @swamp-witch
"I think this is a very poignant poem about family and love and loyalty. I was thinking that love and loyalty could be "like fingers" because they hold things together. Is my interpretation correct? You words are refresh…" -
17 Thu
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27 SunReceived a critique
on Scene from a dream (a working title. Storytelling workshop) from @wesley snow
"I've been having trouble "being" of late also, so I was unaware that you were not here. I'm gladdened to see you hanging on this (or perhaps it's hanging on to you?). I certainly wouldn't mind you throwing out bits and…" - March 2012
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13 TueReceived a critique
on Scene from a dream (a working title. Storytelling workshop) from @wesley snow
"... has led you to consider narrative poetry on a larger scale then it has done what I intended. As always, it's great to see a poet create something complete in a shop, but narrative poetry can be very new to a lot of…" -
13 TueCritiqued
"THE EMPTY GLENS (FINAL VERSION)" by @Tam the Chanter
"That, Ian, is a brilliant tale! I'm at work at the moment, but bugger that! I wouldn't stop reading if the boss man was right behind me. I enjoyed that very much. As a whole I find it flawless. I wonder what could possi…" - February 2012
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06 MonCritiqued
"WINTER'S SONG " by @scribbler
"I just have to let you know I enjoy this poem very much. I love nature poetry, it's one cliche that never dies for me, as nature itself, it is forever being reborn. Big ups for iamb-ulating almost throughout! Those few…" -
06 MonMost-discussed work
Scene from a dream (a working title. Storytelling workshop)
13 critiques to date.
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06 MonPosted a poem
Scene from a dream (a working title. Storytelling workshop)
"Night-time stride beneath fair moon-light," -
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01 WedCritiqued
"Hope Does Not BelongREVISED - More Meter - Iambic Pentameter - Exercise 2" by @MichelleK
"I enjoy this piece. I'm finding it difficult to judge the meter, though it does feel mostly iambic, with a bit o this and that here and there:) here's my picky parts: fung-us, ha-tred, te-ppid and pi-ty are two syllable…" - January 2012
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28 SatCritiqued
"The Bit (more meter)" by @t. reflexion
"let me have a go:) The thea/ tre has men/ who like/ to pre tend Some force/ them selves/ to crack fun/ny short jokes Others are/ natural in /what they /do I stepped/ in pretend/ ing to be/ a wolf An un/ known Ti/ ger ca…" -
20 FriCritiqued
"Defibrillator (Iambic Pentameter)" by @Race_9togo
"I realy enjoy this piece. It's very descriptive, I imagined myself there. My only gripe, and it's a small one, is the lack of punctuation. I know, I know, each to there own as far as poetry goes, i just want to breath:)…" -
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26 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- February 2011
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- May 2010
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- April 2010
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30 FriFirst critique offered
on "Battle of Wits on Chequered Soil" by @raj
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27 TueFirst publication
Caught in this web... to shine
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26 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
I am here. ...sometimes.
Location: South Africa, ZAF
Recent Work
the seed and the flower
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Like Fingers
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Death Eternal
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Death and the soliloquy
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Flux
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Moon of the Morn'
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Thrown to the coals
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Workshops
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| Storytelling in Verse | (syllabus) | Olympic Pool, Plunge Pool | Started 2012-02-04 | Concluded |
| More Meter | (syllabus) | Shark Pool, Plunge Pool | Started 2012-01-11 | Concluded |