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What you can't see

I can't keep my mind from racing

I can't keep my heart from beating

I can't keep myself from shaking

I can't keep my eyes from tearing

I can't keep my body from trembling

I can't keep my thoughts from swirling

I can't keep my head from spinning

I can't keep myself from feeling

I can't keep my emotions in check

I can't keep my anxiety at bay

It's like a storm inside my head

That just won't let up

It's like a hurricane in my chest

That is tearing me apart

I can't keep myself together

I can't keep myself from falling apart

I can't keep my anxiety at bay

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With me deeply. You captured the exact feeling of anxiety/panic all within a well constructed poem. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Hi RoseBlack!

Just thought a little poem like this would show someone that they aren't alone. Thank you so much for your comment!

MindOfGator

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Not alone! Great write.

~RoseBlack~

Repetition and anaphora can be powerful. You’ve used it well here.

"To fly is to fall."

we all panic! Our anxiety breaks down the fence and runs away; we just have different triggers. Many times, they don't make sense to other people; but we can't help it! You hit it right on the head here. Good job, all the way around. ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

What goddamn ride those panic attacks are. Sorry you have to go through them. I do to occasionally and thankfully less frequently and less intense in recent years. My sister once called an ambulance thinking she was having cardiac issues. This is very real.

Study the mechanism of the vagus nerve. It’s a fight or flight response to the invented threats of your thinking. Research it. It helped me immensely knowing the physiology behind this madness.

Tim

I have only had a few of them. the first one when I was eleven. I know what you have gone through and it is my hope for you that you have few of them, far apart and in between lucid moments.

*hugs, Cat

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It is an intentional technique that the author uses throughout the poem. Repeated lines in a poem serve as a mnemonic device. Repeating lines in a poem can also help create emphasis or urgency. When a line, word, phrase, or stanza is repeated, the reader notices. They are drawn into that detail. Authors can use repetition to help drive home an important message within the poem.

And this is a typical example. Well delivered piece!
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