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when the world was
empty cold
The oceans wave would
lap and fold

Beast opened his eyes to
a world without life
a day without night

A feelingless domain
of lonely beings
Leaving him
with no reason of the
way things turned out
why he's still around
He wanders away coming to a shimmery lake
He Thinks...

Is this dream we call
a reality well kept?
Is the Keeper of all worlds
in a place
where He wept?

Crying tears
upon a realm of constant
destruction and despair
ways to repair
damage that has been done

The devil will
realize she’s won
Eating at our minds
Ripping at our souls
Selling all the lies
best sold

Free at cost but
price is high
Leaving our soul
left there
to a body that can never die

To end the pain
which lays at wait
has taken her plate
Left you in a state
where you relate
rage hate
You want to wipe the slate clean

Just leave this lonely world
with constant turmoil
This pathetic life is
We are only roaches
left here
an interesting show for
that think
we don’t know


Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I wrote this as 1 continuous stream of unconcious thinking Im not very good with where to break off so if its not right I'd appreciate some feedback and a lil direction as to how n where one should break at
Editing stage: 


I do tend to be a tad on the darkside .. but its more fun there lol
thanx for reading it

Alone we shall find our ways into worlds of never imagined discoveries

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