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Virus
Which sort of virus would I like to have?
on my computer damaging my work?
on my text phone spying on me?
Or one placed in my body by lust?
Of all of these if I were to rave
I'd prefer the one with the perk
Except if the virus was HIV
And was a betrayal of trust
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Last few words:
Trying to emulate the rhyming in Pippa's song by Robert Browning.did I get a similar style?
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Wed, 2013-01-02 06:51
Well the rhyming style matched
So what ? What were you thinking?
The poem works on its own.
I once had unprotected sex with someone I knew was a whore junkie, the romance being if she had it, I wanted it too. Yeah, sick, I know.
cheers,
Jess
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Frenchf
Wed, 2013-01-02 20:28
Thanks lovely
I'd worry about a death wish even for love although Romeo and Juliet was such