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something sculpted
about you;
statue-like, perfect.
Aloof with
the cool confidence
of a monarch.

Your gaze,
it cuts through me
with a cold heat;
unseeing, uncaring.
Am I not here,
or your regard
doesn't fall so

I can't be here,
for you don't
see me
fall to my knees.

Cupid's switched
his bow and quiver
for a .50 caliber.

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Never trust another person with a gun LOL.
Fun Piece, an old saying of getting the bullet is to lose ones job,
but I guess you need a flak jacket.
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Lol. I suppose I do need one Ian, thanks

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It Does seem as if some women are on a different level than we lowly men lol. I'm a bit undecided about whether some of these lines should be combined so I'll try to come back later and give it more thought.......stan

(though that's not terribly unusual)

Yes, I get this, and it kind of got me.

I did a recording, hope you like it.
It's my first attempt with Soundcloud so let me know what you think, like, if it works [grins]

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