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Thoughts of You

Frequent visitor to my thoughts are you.
Joyful respite from the mundane.
Sometimes conjured up and not.
But the greatest fun of all,
those out of nowhere thoughts of you.
They play their endless game of hide and seek.
Conceal themselves behind the pages of a book,
between the lines of some report.
Even found peeking out from behind the cloud of
some decision being made.
When tripped across they linger not long enough
for contemplations touch, before they're off again.
They laugh and giggle as they escape the grasp of consciousness
and run away to search out some new hiding place.
There to wait for me to stumble over them once more,
as I pursue the balance of my day, and those
out of nowhere thoughts of you.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 


Love your writing, but would like to see it in stanzas and a few breaks to let the thoughts of you flow better, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks for the read Ian and the encouragement. I'm looking over "Thoughts" with the intention breaking it up into stanzas. Should there be the same number of lines in each stanza. I seem to recall somewhere or other that was the rule, or is this not necessarily so. You're right, the breaks would make a better read.

Capt Jack

Gerald Walsh

author comment

You will have to look up poetry layout forms for an answer to that unless one of our learned poets replies..
If you read a lot of the poems on stream from Esker to Moonman there seems to be a modern trend to shorter lines stanzas that vary in number of lines but I think it will be better to learn the Classic way first then let your own style take over as the classics take in Meter and many of the correct ways, I am not trained in the classics so I just blunder through, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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