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Tenacity

Submitted by Lavender on Thu, 2024-02-15 23:51

The ivy stretches up the wall
its leaves so small
but still it tries
to touch the skies.

It clings to mortar and red brick
its leaves so thick
its hearty vine
and veins entwine.

It trails along the window frame
showing no shame
in wanting more
than earthen floor.

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Structured: Western
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A little ditty and allegory for tenacity. A Minute Poem: 12 lines, 3 quatrains, 8,4,4,4 syllable count, aabb, ccdd, eeff rhyme pattern.
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2024-02-16 04:18

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Whatever pattern it is...It is Great, so musical! I love it. You have made the ordinary, extraordinary!!!

*hugs, Cat

You could make a light bulb sound interesting!
*ever eddy styx

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Lavender

Fri, 2024-02-16 12:55

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The Light Bulb

There once was a bulb in a lamp
who'd seduce the room like a vamp
she'd tickle the walls
then caress the halls
while shinin' her cute little amp

L :)

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2024-02-17 15:34

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I Love It!!!

* your #1 fan, eddy styx

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Lavender

Sat, 2024-02-17 15:51

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I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Lavender

Fri, 2024-02-16 08:25

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Thank you for reading this little minute poem. I appreciate it!
Eddy, you have given me a "bright" idea! :)
Thank you both!
L

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2024-02-17 15:39

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Dear Lady Lavender,

I can hardly wait to see your creation!

*waiting with anticipation... eddy

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RoseBlack

Sat, 2024-02-17 15:18

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Ivy certainly is tenacious. Reminds me of a vine I have here at the house. Cut it down and it seems to come back stronger and with more tenacity. Most stubborn plant I have ever seen! Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Lavender

Sat, 2024-02-17 15:35

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Ha, ha! Yes, it is! Still, a pretty good role model for the virtue of tenacity.
Hope you are doing well!
Thank you for reading!
L

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