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Sugar daddy

The website was called sugar daddy.com
The strangest of websites to type in
Ancient hopefuls looking for some
Immature females who'd ripen

Pig eyed and wrinkled in denim or jeans
With so much loot to give
Waiting to pay some silly young girl ,
Who needs the money to live

Why go to uni ?why get a degree?
Sugar daddy.com exists
It's much better than a salary
When dollars are clutched in their fist

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Tis true and I lost my first version which was harsher
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Comments

some interesting use of rhyme here.
I'm adding you to my "watch out for" list.

cheers,
Jess
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The title should be "Parasites" this will go on for ever as long as some have more money than sense and others want money instead of sense.
As Jess said it was a little mild, they are on the same line as paedophiles, and others that think their wealth gives them power over others, but we also have to blame the ones sucked into this way some of them are quite capable of thought..
Good write sore subject lol ("Celebrities" after Saville and Co and even before)
Yours , Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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