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Snowstorm (an acrostic)

Submitted by Candlewitch on Sun, 2023-12-03 12:37

Snowstorm Acrostic Poem Challenge:

S-tarting slow, with just a flake or two
n-ight of cloud-crammed canopy of deep indigos
o-ver hilltops and through vales to
w-intery city streets and country roads
s-oon; all too soon, the pace does quicken
t-ossing winds pick up as snowflakes thicken
o-h how they gather as a blizzard gets underway
r-ushing to get home, escape swirling ice and snow
m-other nature's anger expressed as white-out hell!-

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Last few words:

Snowstorm Acrostic Poem Challenge: S-tarting slow, with just a flake or two n-ight of cloud-crammed canopy of deep indigos o-ver hilltops and through vales to w-intery city streets and country roads s-oon; all too soon, the pace does quicken t-ossing winds pick up as snowflakes thicken o-h how they gather as a blizzard gets underway r-ushing to get home, escape swirling ice and snow m-other nature's anger expressed as white-out hell!-

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

12/23 Acrostic Poem Snowstorm

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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neopoet

Sun, 2023-12-03 18:40

Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Snowstorm" is an acrostic that effectively uses the first letter of each line to spell out the title. This is a creative and engaging way to structure a poem. The use of hyphenation to continue the sentence from the first letter of each line is an interesting stylistic choice, although it may disrupt the flow of the poem for some readers.

The poem does a good job of creating a vivid image of a snowstorm, using descriptive language such as "cloud-crammed canopy of deep indigos" and "swirling ice and snow". However, the phrase "mother nature's anger expressed as white-out hell" might be considered a cliché, as the personification of nature as an angry mother is a common trope in literature.

The rhythm and meter of the poem could be improved. The lines vary significantly in length and syllable count, which can make the poem feel uneven. Consider revising the poem to have a more consistent rhythm, which can help to enhance the reading experience.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more developed theme or message. While the description of the snowstorm is vivid, the poem doesn't seem to go beyond this description to explore deeper ideas or emotions. Consider what you want the reader to take away from the poem, and how you can convey this through your words.

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Unca Fez

Sun, 2023-12-03 20:58