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The Rose Of My Life by: Steven Mattison (Cat's Husband)

Submitted by Candlewitch on Sun, 2022-03-27 08:57

by: Steven Mattison:

The rose of my life is fading,
Petal by wilting petal.
As each falls to the ground,
A piece of my life goes with it.
But the penultimate beauty
And glorious fragrance of its bloom
Will live in my heart…
Forever.

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-03-27 09:38

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but gorgeous! The true heart of any poet are the thoughts they bring to the page, not the flowery, lengthy, stuff that a lot of people write and try to impress with. I am impressed with the elegance of a simple thing from a poet's heart. Good stuff!
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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-03-27 09:58

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I just read your comment to Steven. and he thanks you. he told me that the poem was written about me. I have told him about you, too. he says that he is honored by your reading and compliment. thanks, Geez!

*hugs, Cat & Steven

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-03-27 10:43

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as much. He writes well, even if he only posts once in a while, I think that he will have a following here at Neo. Not everyone writes a romantic poem well. He has done that, and I for one, am looking forward to more. I'm sure that if he were to pick one of our Random poem titles, he would get practice and it would make for some good reading. Encourage him to write and then back off and watch him go. It doesn't necessarily have to be a romantic them, but if he finds so much inspiration in you, I'm sure that it would be worth the read. ~ Geez
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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-03-27 10:49

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I think so too. I will try to encourage him. he likes my poetry and eddy styx. I think he would like yours, too, no, I don't think it...I KNOW IT!!!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-03-27 18:02

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thumbs up for that! Geez.
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Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-03-28 08:53

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I think he could write more poetry if he were so inclined. I try to encourage him. I told him what you said. he said thanks!

*hugs, Cat & Steve

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Ray Whitaker

Sun, 2022-03-27 12:59

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so heartfelt....

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-03-28 08:55

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from both of us!

*hugs, Cat & Steve

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