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Praying For A Generous Wind ( May Contest )

Blow wind blow.
Take the misery 'way with you.
Leave no pain on the earth,
bring but love and lots of mirth.
Blow wind blow

If Spring it is or if Summer,
I think it doesn't even matter.
I know you wish oft to please,
so breathe incense to our seas.
Blow wind blow.

Then be back with heaven's cheer
to embrace our darling sphere.
To free the tears from blurry eyes,
kind enough to bring cool smiles
Blow wind blow

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May I suggest using unto rather than onto. I like the repetition of the line blow wind blow
good luck on the contest

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

dear Chrys... Always appreciate you kind visit.
Edited as suggested

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Great title. It would be an answered prayer if the wind could blow away all the troubles of the earth, and replace with love and mirth. I am ignorant to the word "oudore" in the second stanza, line 4 - it seems important and I want to make certain I am understanding correctly. I like the repetition of "Blow wind blow" also. I love it that the wind is being addressed. Such a warm and respectful communication.
Thank you,
L

I adore lavender BTW ;-)
I thought Audore is kind of incense. Strange enough my Arabic Eng. dictionary give me audore but when I checked the En English one i can't find the word, so I simply replaced it with incense.
Always appreciate the honest feedback.
Thanks

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Blow wind blow, just lovely. A soft and gentle poem.

Thank you...Teddy

Happy that you visited my humble poem and that you like it adds to my pleasure.
Many thanks

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but slow winds
can never blow away
ATLANTIC kind
are needed today
May your windy poem
win I pray
Through the Pacific too
Virus will also then
think twice too

Thank you for your kind visit and the wishes.
Really appreciate it

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could blow away the troubles of the world. If everyone was like you and wished for it, maybe it could happen!
I like the rhyme and near rhyme and I say good luck in the contest. Oh, you have a typo, You spelled incense wrong in the poem. ~ Geezer.
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Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

Always great to hear from a rhymer like you.
Thanks for spotting that typo and for your kind wishes.

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Try the last line reading from be to and? See if you like it better, and even simply without eitherI love this poem

Thank you...Teddy

I really like your suggestion.
Thank you
I'm happy you like it

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Hi, Rula; just googled "unto," which actually is just an archaic term for "to." I would stay away from archaic terms that lead to confusion on part of the reader. I would suggest "Leave no pain on earth." (Simple, but precise. See my note below.) Jerry

Note: un·to
1. archaic term for 'to.'
"do unto others as you would have them do unto you"
2. archaic term for until.
"marriage was forever—unto death"

who wants archaic? Appreciate your kind note
Hope you enjoyed the read.

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