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Sometimes I think of good old days,
but were they really all that good?
Perhaps they have brightened by time's glaze
as I peer beneath memory's hood.

But the past can not be cured
nor brought back for any one,
just recollections old and blurred.
Like leaves they slowly become dun.

Let me tell you a secret my friend
the future has an ending point
and each will come to our own end
like the snap of a worn joint.

So let the past go where it will,
let future's worries dissipate.
We'll never make time stand still.
It's Now which adds up to our fate.

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Structured: Western
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This poem demonstrates a strong understanding of rhythm and rhyme, which contributes to its overall flow. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter. While some lines adhere to a set number of syllables, others do not, which can disrupt the rhythm of the poem. For example, the line "Like leaves they turn slowly dun" has more syllables than the lines surrounding it. A more consistent meter would enhance the musicality of the poem.

Secondly, the poem's theme of time and memory could be explored more deeply. While the poem does touch on these themes, it could delve further into the emotions and experiences associated with them. This could be done through the use of more vivid imagery or metaphors.

Lastly, the poem's language could be more varied. The poem relies heavily on simple, everyday language, which can limit its ability to evoke strong emotions in the reader. By incorporating more sophisticated or unusual words, the poem could become more engaging and thought-provoking.

Overall, while this poem has a clear theme and structure, it could be improved by refining its meter, deepening its exploration of its themes, and varying its language.

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Hello, Stan,
Love the title, and everything that follows. I feel the wisdom and the knowledge of a life well-lived. This is one of your lovely, reflective walks - but this is not through the woods and meadows. It's through time itself.
Thank you!

I'm pleased you link well of this scribble

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I just wanted to say; good luck on the contest. this is a theme I often think about. well done!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

I wrote this before reading about the contest then said what the heck. Entering a contest can help stir interest in the contest. As to similar thoughts. Great minds might think alike so maybe ours do too lol

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