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my sea of sorrow

I sit here sipping life’s sea
of sorrow
as the tides of time turn towards
tomorrow.
Oh how I try to kill this trend.
But I know the
Rain of pain
Will never end.
It only waters
My tree of memory
Then all the
voices of you came flooding
Back to me
I need another glass
Again in
order to forget and
make my
Mind pretend.
That our love
didn’t really end.

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How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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my inspiration is the Frank Sinatra song yesterday
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Simply gorgeous.

Thank you...Teddy

I hope your okay

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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i'm ok, you?

Thank you...Teddy

Mind pretend.
That our love
didn’t really end.

Thank you

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Hello, Edward,
Frank Sinatra sure does bring his own style and flavor to Yesterday. Such a simple song with such an intense feeling of loss. Your poem has much of this same feeling. Strong ending.
Thank you,
L

I listen to music that brings visions or thoughts within my mind I then translate my thoughts into a poetry

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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