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my sea of sorrow
I sit here sipping life’s sea
of sorrow
as the tides of time turn towards
tomorrow.
Oh how I try to kill this trend.
But I know the
Rain of pain
Will never end.
It only waters
My tree of memory
Then all the
voices of you came flooding
Back to me
I need another glass
Again in
order to forget and
make my
Mind pretend.
That our love
didn’t really end.
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How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
my inspiration is the Frank Sinatra song yesterday
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Edward nigma
Mon, 2020-10-19 07:34
Thank you
I hope your okay
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
lovedly
Mon, 2020-10-19 11:40
sorrow poem with a loveliest end frnd
Mind pretend.
That our love
didn’t really end.
Edward nigma
Mon, 2020-10-19 13:10
Thank you
Thank you
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
Lavender
Mon, 2020-10-19 19:31
my sea of sorrow
Hello, Edward,
Frank Sinatra sure does bring his own style and flavor to Yesterday. Such a simple song with such an intense feeling of loss. Your poem has much of this same feeling. Strong ending.
Thank you,
L
Edward nigma
Mon, 2020-10-19 19:58
Thank you
I listen to music that brings visions or thoughts within my mind I then translate my thoughts into a poetry
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.