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My journey

Submitted by Trouble on Thu, 2022-07-21 23:58

To day
A bitter closure
Set my mind free
No more will I wonder
Reasons and questions
To the saddness that weights heavy within me
A smiple document
Gave a explanation
That God call her to heaven
With a illness
No one could see.
She was healthy
We all believed
I guess God needed another angel

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This was about my girlfriend that passed away on may 16 I found her when I got back from out of town she was already gone.i had to kick in my door. So I never knew what she died from. Until I got the autopsy that was the smiple document that said she had a heart attack
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c lynn brooks

Wed, 2022-07-27 20:35

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did you mean called? Very sad poem. I'm sorry

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