What a beautiful piece of work. The rhythmic pattern, pace, and rhyming scheme played well.

Good job!
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Nice to see you posting something.
Yeah, I hear you about the title, it kind of sounds like a few other pieces you've written. Maybe someone has an idea.

You have a typo in the fourth line of your first stanza; Get rid of one of the [a's]
and I do believe that you have left out a [d] [crowded], second line of third stanza.
Otherwise, a page from my book, [although I don't see myself going on any long hikes].
As always, you leave me sitting here as though I have been there with you. ~ Geez.
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Hello, Stan,
Another fine walk with you! This is an interesting rhyme pattern and you've done it very well. i stumble a bit with the rhythm of "Ahead I see the slope is getting steep" - perhaps something similar to "Ahead the slope is getting steep." ?? The introspective line, "So near, yet so far away..." stands out. Really like the thoughtful pause it brings.
Thank you!
L

Interesting. Any walk in nature is gonna draw me in. Your rhyme pattern and timing are both excellent. Take care of those knees in the cold.

Tim

thank you for taking me along with you on this fine walk. it is good that there was a stump for me to rest my rump. my boneless knees thank you, lol! as excellent as always!

* love & hugs, Cat

I have nothing to add except maybe a suggestion above for your title.

Sigh I've missed our walks.

Love always Sis xox

I am always late but never to your walks. Enjoyable as always.
As I see you are writing this as an entry for the contest, so I find no harm to remind you that the title should hold the same title of the contest and I thought that it's a good alternative for the present one if you are not well satisfied with it.
Great to read you again.

I’ve noticed a lot of your poems have this beautiful, almost lyrical, simplistic quality (that’s not so simple to execute at all) and this one is no exception. I loved it.