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Moon Moods (by: eddy styx)
Moon Moods (by: eddy styx)
I never liked the moon, you see
too much light, just not right for me.
the full moon reflects a patch of light
ever so painful to my eyes this night,
shining there with all its might.
oh, I never liked the moon, you know
the full moon drenches all below
makes my footsteps cautious and slow
makes my headache throb so loud
as if my head were in a thunderous cloud.
I never liked the moon so full
as I seek the shadows narrow and deep
among the shadows I don't have to crawl or creep.
for I play a game of hunt and seek
to find a maiden unaware and meek.
ah! under the moon, the black clouds gather!
on a park bench, I hear two maids blather
gossiping in the cool of the chilly night
I eagerly wait for them to part, the time is right
under the dark moon, spying my quarry, I tense and strike!
Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2022-04-18 11:18
Moon Moods is a good title...
If I were you, I would choose an other word, besides [dreary].
you describe the full moon as being too bright!
Dreary means pallid, plain, banal, and all kinds of dreary stuff.
You could use [painful, bright, hard on, etc.] but not dreary!
I also wouldn't use [robust] night, maybe something like [frosty,
black ink]... other than that, you set a scene for butchery!
Nice! ~ Geez.
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One
Wed, 2022-04-20 04:45
Sis,
really like the atmosphere this creates. I do agree with Gee about the word "dreary" but other than that this poem sits perfectly well with me & I also dislike the moon or alien spaceship that controls us!! (that's for another time).
A full moon is not for the liking of an eddy needing the darkness to stalk.
regards
One.
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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"