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Misfire of the Heart
Her feelings and attachments
always felt messy.
Wild and uncharted too.
Attending to them was work for us both.
Broken sometimes works out,
but I had to walk away this time.
Not because I didn't care,
but I just couldn't breathe underneath
the weight of all her damage.
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Lavender
Thu, 2023-08-17 22:19
Misfire of the Heart
Hello, Michael,
I feel the heaviness in this, and then the relief. It reminds me of Rumi: "Life is a balance of holding on and letting go." I like the brevity of the three line stanzas. There is a sharp sense of realization.
L