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Medusa Betrayed

Medusa Betrayed

a priestess was she
in Athena's holy domicile.
blessed with bloom of youth
and radiant smile.
so fair of face
and bodily grace,
untouched by human hand.
one fateful day
Poseidon did espy
with lustful eye,
Medusa strolling in the sand.
"I must have, can find no salve,
to placate this desire
or quench this fire"
he quoth, and swore an oath
"Medusa will be mine!"
so by dark of night
and celestial moonlight
he broke into the shrine.
he stole a kiss
from this innocent miss
who much to her shame
would take the blame
incurring Athena's wrath.
she struck Medusa down,
creating a crown
of serpents instead of hair.
then was Medusa exiled
to a western isle
to suffer her fate in a rocky lair!

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to read a poem that isn't hidden in complicated imagery and tells a tale. You know, a good old fashioned tale.
I did enjoy this.
Oh and the price us poor women have to pay......... (that was said as a semi humorous quip).
Jx

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and thank you for reading and commenting on this; my first successful "storytelling poem" I'm glad you liked it. mythology is so full of tragedy!

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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and I much enjoyed your after thought! :)

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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