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When you were young
And travelled buoyant on
the air,

When you bore beauty,
yet were a little easier
to bear

When, you had a keen rasping

And scarce knew how
to tell a lie,

In substance, when you,
were smaller in humility, yet holier than now,

And love was boundless
regardless of how

Life’s purpose went, demanding definition
there you were:

In a constellation, with all the others,
yet brighter than any above us,

Defying time,
there you are, a signal fire,
a guiding star.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Sort of structured - a recollection of an earlier time, and a painting, L'Étoile (The Star) by one of the Impressionists - can't recall who.
Editing stage: 


I am happy I haven't missed this one. Awesome and enjoyable read.
I am also happy you've mentioned the story of the title. I am not so keen on using a different language to title the piece, but this is a different case here.
Thank you, No suggestion I can think of at the moment, but much appreciation indeed.


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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There you go - that's was the inspiration, a print in a little book of the impressionists, and some vague memories of another time. I did a little research, and found it was by Degas (detail here: I'm not sure if that's the artist in the wings, looking on, or what the story behind it was, always found it interesting, there you go!
Thank you - glad you enjoyed.

Take care - as always - will take some time to look at your poems too.



Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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