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With Hope For The Future

Submitted by Lavender on Thu, 2023-09-14 21:04

We planted ninety oak trees.
Will they prosper well?
Is there time?

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
This is a Quinzaine. There are 15 total syllables: 7,5,3 in three lines. First line is a statement, the other two are questions relating to the first line. (Per Shadow Poetry) Is there enough hope and time to replenish Earth's woods and forests after deforestation? Thank you! L
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Ruby Lord

Tue, 2023-09-19 08:55

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Hey Lavender, I've never read a Quinzaine before I think. It's a bit like a haiku turned upside down. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Lavender

Tue, 2023-09-19 13:53

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I had not heard of it, either. Thought I'd give it a try. It's actually a bit harder than I thought at the beginning, especially when trying to add some depth to the theme and purpose of the poem. Here, I was trying to convey the message of replenishing our woods and forests after deforestation - hoping there is enough time. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L

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