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He's The "One"!

He's The "One"!

born under the dark moon
of Cancer and the crabs bite.
he is made of mercurial stuff
obscured from man's search light.

he is mysterious and enigmatic
most often you will find
that he is aloof on his own
none have penetrated his mind

most miscreants fear him
for his tenacity and drive.
feeling that they might
not make it back alive!

he is an unofficial enforcer
the man of shadows calling,
into dark unpleasant places
he finds those who are crawling.

slip sliding into the night
most won't know he is near
until after his whip cracks
then their eyes open wide with fear!

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with pride for such admiration shown, I am sure that the enigmatic "One" must be concerned that you have blown his cover!
I can see that you have made an observation of his signature, and incorporated it into the piece: "With all that I am and all that I could be"... Nice job and I'm sure that he will be as pleased as I am of my own honor, that you have written. ~Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

yes, I hope he will like that I appreciate his persona. he is a little bit shy when it comes to being put in the spotlight, though. I hope he takes it well, as no offense is meant.

*hugs, Cat

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hmmm...a poem about me. You know me & how I struggle with this kind of thing. That said, it's written very well & I do see myself in this. You know me too well.

Thanks Sis.

regards

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

thank you, my dearest One! I had very much hoped that you would like it!

*Hugs, Sis

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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

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