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Happy: An Acrostic (Challenge)

Happy: An Acrostic

Holiday elements of joy and peace,
Always inherent in the changing seasons.
Preparations planned with love,
Peaceful aura 'round the table.
Years bounty encompassing all!

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The poem "Happy: An Acrostic" adheres well to the structure of an acrostic poem, with the first letter of each line spelling out the word "Happy". This is a common and effective technique in acrostic poetry.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter. The first and second lines have eight syllables, the third has six, the fourth has five, and the fifth has six. Adjusting the syllable count to be consistent across all lines could improve the rhythm of the poem.

In terms of imagery, the poem does well in evoking a sense of joy and peace associated with holidays and changing seasons. However, the poem could delve deeper into these images to create a more vivid picture for the reader. For instance, instead of stating "Holiday elements of joy and peace," the poem might describe specific elements that evoke these feelings.

Additionally, the phrase "Years bounty encompassing all" is somewhat vague. It could be beneficial to specify what the "bounty" is and how it "encompasses all". This could add more depth and specificity to the poem.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structure. Each line begins with a noun or adjective, followed by a verb. Varying this structure could make the poem more engaging and dynamic.

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A short, sweet poem regarding all the different feelings during the holidays. Makes me think of when I was younger and this time of year brought warm feelings. Great job.

~RoseBlack~

This brings to mind all the holiday celebrations over the last 41 years. They have all been with beloved friends. The poem describes what these holidays should be. Nice!

Thanx,
Steve

These holidays with you!

*much love, Cat Inc.

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equally charmed, by your description of these holidays, indeed, ALL holidays should be celebrated. It doesn't matter what the subject or the religion is, it should just be fun and spent with family, not in contest with anyone or anything. No violence, no harassments, just a celebration of faith or what have you. Thank you for helping to spread the cheer!
BTW, typo alert, it's [planned] ~ Geez.
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Thank you for reading and commenting, also for catching that typo! I am glad that you liked this poem as I wrote it with much thought and only truth deciding each line. I hope your days are filled with contentment.

*love & hugs, Cat

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Hello, Cat,
Very nice! "Peaceful aura 'round the table." What a wonderful feeling!
Thank you!
L

Thank you! May your holiday season be joyful.

*hugs & merry... Cat

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