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Gimme Shelter

The Stones and the Ramones
Social Distortion, out of the LA Punk scene
even Miles and Coltrane
She doesn’t need them

Still, in that void, there is a rhythm
found in her eyes, and in her heart
I let the sound sweep over me
It makes its own music

I listen to it over and over
A melody so beautiful
it can make you feel sorry
for blueberry pie

Her music has a piano
that finds our note of joy,
and a saxophone too,
that cries soulfully
somehow saying what I feel

I don’t know if she understands
the music she makes for me like I do
even though I can hear it plainly
simply when she breathes

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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Not Explicit Content


i read any I find with an interest unequaled in most other poetry. it"s just me, with a rich history of music. attempting as you did to give the "flavor" of bands to the first stanzas... and you gave it a beautiful turn at the end. nice

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Appreciate your thoughts Ray. Wrestled with the last stanza, but was happy with how this turned out.


Michael Anthony

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Glad you enjoyed this one Teddy. Sometimes we get lucky in love, but there was a LOT of bad luck too.


Michael Anthony

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*applauds* This poem is so sweet and magical, and I can almost hear the music of it in my mind. "A melody so beautiful it can make you feel sorry for blueberry pie" Perfect!!

Fantastic job :)

"The true alchemists do not turn lead into gold; they turn the world into words." -William H. Gass

Thanks Asche! The silly thing was how much thought I put into which kind of pie to use. =)

Michael Anthony

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