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Down The Road

Submitted by Depressed 1 on Sun, 2023-07-16 07:16

I am heading down a road

From which there is no return

I feel the night as it approaches

As my mind, it starts to burn

Temptation pulls me to the side

Its attraction it is so strong

The lure is more powerful

Ever since you have been gone

I feel the disappointment inside

It cuts me like a knife to the bone

I cannot rise up above it anymore

It will just not leave me alone

This road is a very desolate long one

And I know that one day it must end

When the pain and sorrow overwhelm me

I will crash, and I will burn to a singe

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Title: Down The Road

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The poem "Down The Road" explores themes of longing, temptation, disappointment, and the inevitability of consequences. The imagery of a road symbolizes a journey, both physical and emotional, and the sense of being trapped with no possibility of turning back. The use of repetition in the opening lines ("I am heading down a road / From which there is no return") effectively emphasizes the speaker's feeling of being trapped in their current situation.

The poem effectively conveys a sense of darkness and impending nightfall, which mirrors the speaker's emotional state. The line "I feel the night as it approaches" creates a vivid image and adds to the overall atmosphere of the poem. Additionally, the use of the phrase "my mind, it starts to burn" suggests a growing intensity of emotions and inner turmoil.

The mention of temptation adds another layer to the poem, highlighting the speaker's struggle with making choices and resisting allure. However, it would be

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