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Difference faces

Submitted by Trouble on Mon, 2022-08-22 20:12

My friends all wear different faces
Sometimes they lie but my heart still embraces
They use my love against me for any reason .
When will I find the friendship's I've been chasing
Regret and blame are my regular places
They are the nightmares that my mind embraces .
I I'm healing now because my true love said to me only my heart is the face you will ever see

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-08-23 11:02

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the story. I like the fact that you used near-rhyme in the fourth line and didn't really question it, because it was close enough.
I think you can do better with the last line.
Break it into two lines to read: I'm healing now, because my true love said to me
."My heart is the only face you will see.".
~ Geezer.
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