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Dear Hanh

Submitted by Triskelion on Fri, 2022-12-23 00:03

Your eyes
Rose above the hill
So many had failed to climb
What did you find?
(your answer here, please)
Oh, dragonfly.

Thomas

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
Cultural differences need time and patience to harmonize.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2022-12-23 03:56

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a surprise ending is always an eye-opener! I agree with the sentiment behind the poem, and I'm glad to have read it.

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Rula

Fri, 2022-12-23 04:48

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I'm a fan of bravity, and this is an excellent example of succinctness.. I might not have gotten the full message yet I still appreciate the thought.
I too had to agree with your last words. I'm one of those who come from a very different culture to most of those fellow poets who post here, which makes me consider and reconsider what I post before I do, so that I won't be misunderstood.
Thank you for sharing.

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Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-12-23 06:31

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You think it’s not a big commitment because it’s only a few lines until you read it. Then it’s a microcosmic universe

Tim

Geezer

Fri, 2022-12-23 19:42

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~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Triskelion

Thu, 2023-01-26 02:46

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There was hope. I was really trying. Thanks for all your comments and keep thinking the future will be brighter and friendlier. Cheers all.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

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