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Come Away, Come Away

Come away, come away
As I lazily lay
It was the last day in the month of May,
When it said come away, come away

Still I sit, never flit, out of wit
In my chair in the middle of nowhere
To go anywhere, I surely do care
But still I sit there, in the middle of nowhere

I can't find the strength
As I lie at full length
In this bed that I dread
But still it said,
From far far away,
Come away, come away
Like a daunting whisper, it taunts
Never leaving me, it haunts
To grant me needed ambition,
Or supply me with intuition

Carry me away, I say,
Take me away, so far far away
I can no longer stay in this chair and lay
Let me explore, I implore
The endless shore and so much more
Let me see, I plea
All that thee have made for me
Let me out, I shout
Out of this route of endless doubt

Come away, Come away
I still hear it say
Even to this day
It will never cease to say,
Come away, come away

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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easily see the [ excuse the obivious pun ] Poe/m influence. No crits as yet, will have to come back later. Just got the use of my laptop here at the hospital. Nothing serious, just troublesome crap. I have lots of catching up to do. Will come back later for better look. I know many must have welcomed you to Neo, but will add mine. ~ Geezer

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Thank you! But i've never thought of this as a rap poem, haha

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