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"Blinkish" Sky

“What color would you call that horizon?” she asked,
as we walked along the waterfront at dusk.

“I really don't know. I'm not good with the names of colors.
Sometimes I think people just make them up.”

“Well, let's make one up for our sky tonight.”, her offer.
“The sky looks mostly blue and pink along the horizon,
but it's changing quickly. How about ‘blinkish’?”

Do you think I’m being silly?”, her abashed challenge,
as she looked for the telling smirk I can never hide.

“Yes, but that's why we're here together.
And we’re going to need more names
for the shifting colors that are on their way.”

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Free verse
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I've never undestimated the value of silliness in a relationship.
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I whole-heartedly agree. My wife and I have been shifting colors with and on each other for over thirty years. Silliness is certainly a pleasure that everyone should indulge in every now and then. I thoroughly enjoyed this look at what I can imagine to be a real couple and conversation. [If it isn't, it certainly should be]. Nicely done, ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geez! This was inspired by a real conversations, so I wanted to try and capture them as best I could - glad you liked it, and thanks for sharing your thoughts!

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Michael Anthony

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Hello, Michael,
Endearing! The best part of relationships are the most lighthearted!
L

Exactly L! Thanks again for taking the time!

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Michael Anthony

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