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BLINDING BINDING NATION SHAMBLE

Australia population cauldron,
like widespread bushfire smolderin',
initially Irish, Welsh, Scottish, English,
Islander, Kiwis,
joined Polish, Greek, Italian, Vietnamese,
lately Afghan, Iraqi, Africans, Chinese,
all culture different Aborigines.

Trading partners re - arranging,
familiar income status changing,
Caucasians totemising wattle dahlia,
increasingly looking failure,
Chinese buying land,
north Americans withdrawing motor van,
Russians buying mines,
Indians progressively testing clime,
signalling Australia nation flying blind,
Caucasian Australia out of place and time.

Nation building project recollect,
British money building Aussie railways,
Sydney Harbour Bridge,
Snowy Mountain Hydro Scheme,
Murrumbidgee Irrigation Area,
Sydney Opera House,
Rex Connor interstate gas pipeline,
vision failed financial Mickey Mouse,
based in unitary thinking,
now unlikely many cultures clinking,
confirming Australian Caucasian dicks shrinking.

Competing narcissist culture agendas,
nation wisdom relentless all - night benders,
no intelligent indentifiers Caucasian defenders,
insaner than movie by Wim Wenders,
Caucasian Australia living real life,
someone arise organise separation from strife,
social vacuum religion sport drink gamble,
blinding binding nation shamble.

Existing arrangements unacceptable snouts in trough,
alarmed insightful fair compassionate whooping cough,
States - Federal relationship nick - off,
creating new seven year cycle norm,
Internet gifting whole nation perform,
progressively degrading current intensifying storm,
Royals God Governor Generals gone,
majority population no longer just looking on,
personal - citizenship growth for individuals,
groups Local State Federal governments biggest,
all say goodbye administrator politician,
activist bigots.

New nation arrangements regularising change transition,
comprehensive demography universal distribution addition,
initiating pre - vote plain language factual exposition,
everyone clearer informed position,
feeling more comfortable dropping opposition,
first time recorded history allowing,
internal stable social democracy flowering.

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I thought; "This isn't poetry, it's a diatribe! A rant. I looked a little harder to see what might give one the promise of poetry, and discovered that there is rhyme. A pattern that I soon discerned to be one of laying out and serving up of rhyme laden rant. I am not a politician and do not have any real knowledge of Australian government or places and things that you mention. I do recognize that any and all governments have their flaws as does ours and am glad that someone has the wheel and is trying to steer. Keep voting! Maybe someday you will have a benevolent tyrant who does what is right for the country! I wish the same for us! Too often, we are saddled with;"Oh well, at least they..."
You do seem to have a good command of rhyme and near rhyme, though the use of which, is not my; [pardon the expression] "cuppa tea". Welcome to Neopoet, I hope that you enjoy success here and get what you need. Please take advantage of the many workshops and the critique to enhance your work. I will hope that you write something other than political poetry and I will be right here to help or critique. ~ Geezer.
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