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Another Dead Pauper Thoughts...

Another Dead Pauper thoughts…

Who’ll take my place as a pauper,
when I die horribly from being poor.
Will they say it’s right and proper,
to pick another who’ll die for sure.

Strange to write or speak of death,
when I feel it’s hand on my shoulder.
You can smell it’s sour, rancid breath,
every day as you strive to be older.

Fear it, say no, they say it’s inevitable,
that means it’s pretty much a certainty.
Of course I wish it was avoidable,
me thinks I’m in a gang of plenty.

But still I hope they are more giving,
not for me or even my dead shell.
For the poorest still left here living,
a life barely much better than hell.

Oh I know there are a lot of detractors,
even more who will soundly just disagree.
The most emulous are usually our factors,
from a society where even water is not free.

If from our water they must make a profit,
then they tax as we earn to pay their wages.
As far as earths concerned I’d rather be of it,
than let the bastards grind me down in stages.

See we come from water it’s our life’s blood,
nature uses it’s clarity in everything around.
From a most beautiful animal to flowering bud,
we are this ~elemental wonder~ so profound.

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What else can they charge us for. Even our basic needs and rights have a price, when it comes to the profiteers.
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Yet again a perfect write.

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

Thank you very much for your kind words. Love Roscoe....

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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This is a marvelous poem.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Thank you very much for your kind words. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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You've got me wanting to write in meter, something I haven't done in a very long time maybe its time to polish off my rhyming skills lol.

This is a wonderful poem I cannot find fault, what a great poem to read on my return it seems I go away for a little while and when I come back I find the bar has risen again :)

Wonderful to read you my friend

love JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thank you JC, it's so good to have you back. Hope all's well. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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Your poems pack a punch - heartfelt and lay it on the line!

What can I say - I agree with all the above comments.

Love Mand xxxxx

Thank you Mand for your comments, i'm glad you got something from this poem. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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A great write that as JC and all the others say, brings Meter to the fore.
Not to worry about who will take your place in the structure of being, you are unique and will never be replaced, there are many in the world that would gladly take your place, I see them dying each day smiling that they can go to a better place after suffering so..
Take care out there it is a hard thing this Life, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thank you Ian for your very kind comments. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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