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An Aimless Journey of Two Souls

Two heavenly roads diverged into this callous world,
I took the one less travelled by;
And my soul-mate took the other,
Where her car got stuck in huge traffic jam.

I have been looking for her for years,
And I know, for sure,
Now she is looking for me too,
But in opposite directions.

Let St. Valentine light her tank of love,
Let her come to the crossroads where I still misfire.

(Dhaka, 11 February 2014)

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Interesting poem. The last line especially.


No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

Thanks Mr. George.

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The world is round, so if love is true, it will guide your souls with the sounds of heartbeats ad the day you reunite, would be your St. Valentines Day. Trust your heart, trust your soul and trust your love...


raj (sublime_ocean)

THanks Mr. Raj.

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nicely done, bro.Keep up the good work.


but this is the first of your poems I have read. There are some things I would suggest you change, but until I know you better I will refrain.
The other comments enjoyed the subject matter as did I. Somewhat original I should think.

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