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110 Percent
When your back is against the wall
When you stumble and then you fall
When you're told you will always fail
When "You can't" gets rather stale
When the world itself is against you
When crying out in pain is all you can do
You still have to answer your heart's call
Whether you've got to run, walk, or crawl
When you aren't born with a silver spoon
When you feel you have the poor man's doom
On past failures you can't sit and lament
Success is accomplished by giving 110 Percent
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Structured: Western
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Geezer
Sun, 2023-03-05 02:26
I can't disagree...
with anything you have said here.
Your title is good, the theme is equally so.
Your language use is plain and easy to understand
I don't see that big, fancy words would be of any use
and wouldn't recommend changing anything. It stands on its own.
Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Shelby Pryor
Sun, 2023-03-05 17:28
Geezer
Thank you so much for your feedback! I really appreciate it!
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-03-06 06:10
I can’t disagree either
You just got try your best. Even when you do absurd things are gonna try and slow you down. Wisdom is knowing the difference between where your 110% is best applied.
Tim
Shelby Pryor
Mon, 2023-03-06 19:13
Rosewood Apothecary
Exactly! Well said. Thank you so much!
author commentSeren
Mon, 2023-03-06 08:49
Dear Shelby
Sometimes life and the people around us doubt us but never ever stop trying because you don't know what a win is until you've failed spectacularly.
Well done.
Kind regards Seren
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Shelby Pryor
Mon, 2023-03-06 19:14
Serene
Exactly!!! I always say the harder the climb the better the story! Thank you so much!
author commentJackweb
Tue, 2023-03-07 17:21
Good rhyming scheme
I liked the use of aabb. That alone makes it sound musical and the final cadences.
Nice one!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Shelby Pryor
Thu, 2023-03-09 16:13
Jackweb
Thank you! To be honest I just started with the first line and this is what came of it! Thanks again!
author commentJackweb
Thu, 2023-03-09 17:20
You're welcome
A single line stirs a chain reaction and there, poetry is born!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb