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New Year's Day

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Mon, 2024-01-01 21:26

Another year gone
Another new day
Just a minute later
But a brand new way

Resolutions are made
But are they kept?
When the year ends
What will be left?

Plans are meant to keep
Habit are made to break
Motivation will never last
Discipline takes the cake

Don't wait for chances
Winners always take them
Pressure is the difference
Between a rock and a gem

It's 2024, 2023 is in the past
Keep your eyes on the prize
Keep a smile on your face
Don't listen to the haters' lies

Never follow the crowds
Don't forget you are enough
Life is a challenge, but you
Can step up and be tough

You are never alone in life
Even when it feels that way
Don't you ever stop fighting
It's all new, it's New Years Day

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Tue, 2024-01-02 03:30

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "New Year's Day" captures the theme of new beginnings and the challenges that come with setting resolutions. The structure of the poem is consistent, with each stanza containing four lines and a consistent rhyme scheme. The use of repetition in the first stanza ("Another year gone / Another new day") emphasizes the passage of time and the opportunity for a fresh start.

The poem explores the idea of resolutions and questions their effectiveness. The lines "Resolutions are made / But are they kept?" and "Plans are meant to keep / Habits are made to break" highlight the common struggle of following through with goals. This adds depth to the poem by acknowledging the potential for failure and the need for discipline.

The use of imagery in the line "Pressure is the difference / Between a rock and a gem" is effective in conveying the importance of perseverance and resilience. It encourages the reader to embrace challenges and not succumb to external pressures or negative influences.

The poem also touches on the idea of individuality

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