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Fair Weather Friend

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Sat, 2024-04-27 00:42

Friends can turn
From a mistake
Just misunderstood
The world can shake

I never lied to you
I just played the game
So did you, and I thought
It would always be the same

And yet when you don't
Bother to stick together
How am I the bad guy
For fighting the weather

I'm a manipulator and a liar
Simply for not joining you
Well, you didn't even ask me
What was I supposed to do?

I was with the bad guys, really?
They treat me good and are kind
You found your happiness alone
And I'm wrong for finding mine?

And so the queen is another joker
And I guess I'm just another slut
You're likely gonna slander my name
While I was pure and right, but

You wanted to win so badly
So I showed you my hand
But when I take the win
I'm low for trying to stand

I'm sick of you telling me
I'm bad with your reprimand
I guess now I know the only
Meaning of fair weather friend

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Sat, 2024-04-27 06:42

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William Lynn

Sat, 2024-04-27 10:26

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Hi Shelby.

Your poem is about a subject that we all have experienced at one time or another and you did a great job of putting a tough subject in perspective.

Fair weather friends need not darken our doors again. We can choose to invest our emotions in those that are with us through thick and thin. They are rare but oh so welcome!

Great job! - Will

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