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Rain-drop
Member since March 2, 2011
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I Miss It
I sit in the sun
The warm loving sun
And yet curse its radiant rays
I hear the quiet chatter of the birds
But cover my ears in dismay
The palm fronds sway in the breeze
Brushing the painted sky
Yet i would quickly trade it all
To sate a longing sigh
I miss the green, the gray the blue
The mist that covered the ground
The rain, the blessed pouring rain
That made such a calming sound
The mountains that climbed into the sky
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On my every side surround
If only i could wander paths
That the remaining world forgot
Hear the sharp piercing cry
Of the beautiful soaring hawk
I miss the eagle, i miss the bear
The fresh printed tracks of a snowshoe hare
I close my eyes and I'm almost there--
But
I am here, that is there
And for now here is where i will stay
To serve my time beneath the sun
And it's beautiful radiant rays
If you ask me how I'm doing
I'll say fine
Then wipe a tear
From mine eye
Rain-drop’s timeline
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15 years of membership
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- March 2011
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16 WedReceived a critique
on I miss it from @scribbler
"As a former navy brat I can identify with missing a former home left behind. I really enjoyed this but have a few ideas you might consider : L-15 on my every side surround 9 rest of poem is in first person ) L-17 try th…" -
16 Wed
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08 TueCritiqued
"Above The Storm" by @paul
"I love it! It is smooth and you could get lost in the lines of the story. It is like the painting at the art museum that you end up staring at for so much longer than you meant to because you just cant walk away. =) Gre…" -
08 TueFirst critique offered
on "Above The Storm" by @paul
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03 ThuReceived a critique
on Teddy Bear from @Arrow
"I liked these lines best: He rests his small paw on it That cursed transparent barrier Threaded tear runs down his felt cheek because they gave me the impression the action was occuring *now*, that I was watching it in…" -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on Teddy Bear from @crypticbard
"But I have been redeemed by my child who not only cares for several but has two of mine and three of my wife's teddies. This poem brings back clear memories of childhood and the wonder of teddy bear adventures." -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on Teddy Bear from @Roscoe Lane
"Welcome to neopoet, yenti is spot on, if i was the teddy i would remember the little boy or girl as well. Try and imagine what the teddy would see from the corner or window. Great theme and your poem is good, it just ne…" -
03 ThuFirst publication
Teddy Bear
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03 Thu
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02 WedNew follower
@Maverick
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02 WedJoined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
I am a high school student in Hawaii and a military child. What i write tends to be of lesser quality, but i will keep trying and hope that i can learn a lot from all of your guys' criticism. I love to read, write, draw, paint, run, and most of all, play the piano. I have been known to sit down for hours and play and play and play...
Thank you so much for the support everybody! =)
Location: USA
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