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station to station

Submitted by Esker on Thu, 2011-08-04 12:23

here by the phone
to hear you
across the waves
the static hisses
like team
like atmospheres seperate

we are islands

lonely in love
falling like wishs
stars diving
in the night

sweet pearl
how I haunt you

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Esker

Thu, 2011-08-04 12:24

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not sure what "team" means here
steam....maybe
like the word team though
its so close to term
terms of team
terminating
terminus terminations

whom knows
its been a week like this
and I love it

...

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pleiades

Thu, 2011-08-04 23:22

"lonely in love"

are we ever really
lonely in love?
even love across the waves...

the emotion itself,
tends to togetherness

INTERCHANGE involves ~

i do think steam fits better than team,
but maybe team, is what is meant to be

falling like wishes
stars diving
in the night

beautiful thoughts...

your writing
always takes me away

p

Esker

Sat, 2011-08-20 12:07

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love this word structured and meaning like instruments for the minds travel
nothing like a good compass a blunderbuss and a mermaid Oh and some
imbibeing elexirs and of course I do know qaulity and finesse And theres
no harm in a slap from a slippery svelte fin!!

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Esker

Tue, 2011-08-09 12:23

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spinning out
wandering what my wonder is
and writing still
whil I jar my world

one thing that may be beautiful
is the talent for the poet is always
as a fallible thing

wish I was beautiful as the works
thats why its a gift

thank you for your comments

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Hooded Stranger

Sat, 2011-08-20 13:57

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Esker,

this really won't do, you've spelt the title correctly!!

How about:

Stayshone to stayshone?

LOL!

HS

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Esker

Sat, 2011-08-20 18:11

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yes indeed
a blunder!! ha ha

I think Knotted made it in there too
I just dont like search engines
they will improve for sure

words are fun though I just threw out a
dictionary taking up too much table space
and my glasses are busted until I get
new store boughts again

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