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SOLUSHUN

feel your tundra eyes as I bury my world
of thoughts against the undulation of
falling dusk
like crushed pumice the clouds dance
their slow menace the glowing ache
of nightfall sighing in the green copper
of the terminal wire

sipping gently your drink with its
bright jewels of perspiration
ice glitters and strawberries
are lipstick red

"you could fix your teeth if you wanted
to you know I just think you like to
look that way because you think it
makes people reavaluate what you
are"

you always land on your feet and find
the brightside But I've lived in the
dark long enough its like the woods
have rubbed off on my fur and midnight
streaks me like shadows

"and If I fixed my teeth Ive got fake teeth
and still an evaluation all I do now is
smile and only the ones not startled can
tell me they're the ones whove been on
this side and perhaps why they are on
thier side..its like a full revolution Babe
sometimes you have to have night and
day"

I smile my jagged smile and keep looking
for a hint of my vivid dreams to come when
I finally sleep
she stirs the ice with a straw the last
of light catching the fire in her hair
and I can feel her eyes on me

its only later when Im almost ive
walked her home
heard her day
and watched the moon struggling
to climb through the jagged edge
of weather

that I realize the affliction

she adores me

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and last bottom lines are names of songs by a group called
Raveonettes original and cover tracks of provocative
music I find compelling to my taste
"Affliction" ... "I Wanna be Adored"

setting is Twiggs
combination of actions of two seperate muses

"when I am almost home....
"it is only later when I have walked her home...."

I think parellel like this a lot
questions are channeled often through many
stations in my mind

part of the interesting or the mundane

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You have lost your poetry.

cheers,
Jess
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already you have studied my poem to see what is reflected
and I see you

poetry is sometimes for poets!

cheers!

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