Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
SEASONS : WINTER [updated]
SEASONS : WINTER
sunlight colors fade to dull
passing through a prism darkly
on my window sill
then shatter into pale
like ghosts dancing on the wall
faces hidden in black lace veils
the day lingers gray and cold
and the sky strikes electric
on the wings of a Winter storm.
the world stands to a still
in Nature's mourning.
I long for a Summer's light to soothe
my broken body and battered soul
but my heart has grown into a Winter'a day
no Summer sun can warm.
Editing stage:
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
Geremia
Wed, 2011-08-24 07:06
:) Grazie assai, Rosinella.
:) Grazie assai, Rosinella. Right now I am hunkering down for a mean hurricane heading ths way-- still a chance it will change course.,
love Joe
author commentGeremia
Wed, 2011-08-24 18:22
:):)
:):)
author commentweirdelf
Sat, 2011-08-27 23:38
Bravo
Such honesty. You can find the beauty amongst the suffering. The sign of a great soul.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Geremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 03:36
I wonder at the mystery of
I wonder at the mystery of it all as that time draws closer. Amazing what you learn about yourself; almost fascinating to observe the "process".
thanks, Jess
Joe
author commentweirdelf
Sun, 2011-08-28 12:53
deleted
.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Hooded Stranger
Sun, 2011-08-28 08:34
comment deleted
comment deleted at request of Geremia,
HS
--------------
Workshops are now open:
http://new.neopoet.com/workshop/find
--------------
With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
Geremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 07:53
Dan, let it go. I don't need
Dan, let it go. I don't need an apology. I took care of ths in my own way. Not important. Other issues pressing.
thanks, Joe
author commentweirdelf
Sun, 2011-08-28 13:40
deleted
And I am truly sorry. It was un called for and I have no excuse.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Geremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 13:03
DELETED
DELETED
author commentGeremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 14:11
But I hope I don;t come
But I hope I don;t come across that way. Any how....
joe
author commentGeremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 06:00
????
????
author commentweirdelf
Sun, 2011-08-28 14:06
I had a brain fart
I wanted to say this is beautifully written, and I can't blame you for the dark content.
I wish you all the best.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Geremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 16:11
Too late. Read my IM.
Too late. Read my IM.
author commentraj
Sun, 2011-08-28 15:24
Joe
the melancholic mood very nicely illustrated in this write...i liked the way you have compared the light and shadow effect to illustrate the high and low moments in life and comparing them to sunshine and the winter chills..i hope i have perceived the essence of your poetry the way i felt it...
Cheers!
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 15:42
Yes, you have, Raj, and I
Yes, you have, Raj, and I appreciate your perceptions.
joe
author commentraj
Sun, 2011-08-28 15:45
Joe
thank you for the confirmation...
wishing for more sunshine on your window sill...
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Sun, 2011-08-28 16:03
Hi Joe
Were it not for the fading of winter's light would we ever really appreciate the warmth of summer? Too bad things are set up so that most of our appreciations are relegated to the times beyond summer. I would make only 1 minor tweak, s-3,l-3 either delete a or 's from summer's.......................stan
Geremia
Sun, 2011-08-28 16:10
I lve in Palm Beach County 60
I lve in Palm Beach County 60 miles north of Miami--talk about summer!
Thanks, Stan,I will make the change.
Joe
author comment