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Kollusion
your chrome is tarnished
our histories dripped
dark rain ran
tracing tactile love
with our blade sharp
resistance
tasting the brutal
krush of lust
in timid laceration
give me a bruise of nouns
and let this cartage dream
shatter
decks of cards
the value of passions
kiss me my queen
let the gate rule
squeal open
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2011-07-22 21:13
This almost sounds...
like you are writing about a car. LOL But knowing you, it is another of your great poems about a woman. Great to see you working, I will try to catch up on what you have been writing. ~ Gee
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Esker
Sat, 2011-07-23 10:20
beautify unadmonished vehicle
Yes Geezer relationships are vehicles in which we agree to "ride"
with, for, too.
been watching much cinema and how the screen flows characters
carefully and a lot of beautiful movies are made from really interesting
books It is about a woman whom once had known me
now its dream realms and houses spilling shadows
rain on windscreens and telly's talking to empty rooms past midnight
winds beneath stars warmed by heat wave gardens
nightmare stirred rest
and cold cloth comfort on tender foreheads
..