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drops of you
the smell of you
permeates my skin
drops of you
resonate
i am a bow for your
plucking, you are my
instrument
play me
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Comments
lou
Fri, 2011-07-22 01:26
Anna
This is a sensual poem, but I'd change the word smell in the first line, maybe you could say, 'your trace permeates my skin,' or 'the trace of you permeates my skin'.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-07-22 06:43
Lou!
Lou!
I did not want to make this a sickeningly sweet poem....using scent of you or fragrance of you, so the *smell* seemed appropriate when engaging in animal lust, modified with a little *music*..
:-)
~A
lou
Fri, 2011-07-22 07:05
Anna
Fine
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-07-22 10:05
Hmmm. This is a purely
Hmmm. This is a purely sexual poem, Ian. The bow refers to body and the instrument refers to well... you know...and so by now you can gather what song is being played...?.
Thanks for reading Ian. And maybe it is a cliche. lol.
~A