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VENOUS

Submitted by Esker on Tue, 2011-05-17 16:07

hold me
billow sail
silvered with
lust

the rust of mermaid
hair the streamer
calm

changeling heart
we play the part
The hero racing
the Villian proud

the mirror whispers
like waves on sand
the slither tongue

and a jaundice moon
slides like clockwork
through the ruins

"What are you waiting for"
exhaulted exhale
I can taste the salt
I can feel the depths
your scales writhing
with your turns

warm
slippery
love

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Esker

Thu, 2011-05-19 12:21

Esker's picture

Hey Hello there
Love your comment
Raw and emotive
poetry

Would love to hear your works spoken by
yourself Just transport myself magically
to Aussie land I lived in bars for awhile
sober of all things

Im only an hour on computer
now these days and public
one day maybe get a land line and
connection

Your works ring of descriptors and
passion

thanks for the comments

author comment

CCfire

Thu, 2011-05-19 12:31

CCfire's picture

a jaundice moon
slides clockwork
through the ruins...

I wish I'd written that right there. Great poem.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

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