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First Strike! (eddy styx)

First Strike

roaming the alleys
I spied a young man
in his early twenties
carrying gasoline.
noticing the sloshing of the can,
his furtiveness dragged me after him.
keeping to the shadows,
I trailed at a distance,
moving when he moved.
He was soon joined
by a red tabby cat,
who wound about his legs
begging for attention.
I identify with cats
going about their
own prowling business.
Watching from the shadows
horror gripped my heart.
Pouring gas on the cat,
he nimbly lit a match,
but the cat fled before
the lit match could land.
Instinctively I jumped,
my bare fist landing on jaw;
he crumpled to the cement.
Dousing him with the
remains of liquid in the can,
I awaited his return
to the conscious world.
When I saw him awaken
his eyes full of terror,
I dropped a match,
springing back
out of harms way,
as his body caught fire
in a violent blaze;
He lit up the night sky,
casting his flailing,
ghastly shadow on the sheds.
The next day’s paper
told of a suspected arson who died
accidentally by his own hand.
A virgin no longer,
first kill has been made
for defense of a cat
I am, somehow, unsatisfied,
For I am a cold-hearted killer
not this thing of unbridled passion.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Another poem for the "Book of Styx II" in preparation to submission for publication. All help and suggestions are welcome. Thanks in advance! Eddy Styx (& cat)
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Comments

Truly terrifying

Love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Thanks, dear.

always eddy (love cat)

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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I glad you liked it, as it is something a little different!

always eddy (love cat)

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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the stealth...the anguish...the killer statement

For I am a cold-hearted killer
not this thing of unbridled passion

makes this write a thriller....held me captive through and through...

much love...

raj (sublime_ocean)

I'm so glad that you liked the build up and the imagery. Thanks for commenting!

always, eddy (& cat)

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Yes! But not a cold hearted killer! His compassion for the cat, and the rage at what man tried to do, and the furiousness with which he responded, leave no doubt. I think Killer would be happy to make the acquaintance of Eddy. Both Killer and Eddy seem to have a soft spot in their hearts for the weak and oppressed. Your word usage was fine, the pattern and rythm flowed well, and I liked the title just fine.

Maybe we could work on something together? ~ Love ya, Gee

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Huge :) from eddy! I'm so glad you liked it and it worked for you. eddy tips his hat to Killer. I think they could be friends, isn't that weird? Maybe, as they have similar interests and weaknesses. A co-write could be very interesting and I am open to it!

always, eddy (love, cat)

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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this next week, we will get together and pick a subject to write about. I am open to suggestions. I will look for message from you. I think it will be fun! ~ Love ya, ~ Gee and Killer.

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Thanks so much for the video treat!

love, Cat

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